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Rejected ๐—š๐—ข๐—ฉ ๐—–๐—ผ๐—ฟ๐—ฟ๐˜‚๐—ฝ๐˜ ๐—•๐—ถ๐—ผ | joseph balboaa | 536994

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joseph modello

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State Organization:gov
Name:joseph balboa
Gender:male
Age:16
Nationality:irish
Place of Birth:dublin
Sexuality:straight
Eye Color:blue
Hair Color:blonde
Tattoos:none
Strengths:


  • Loyal to friends and colleagues
  • Fast learner
  • Cool under fire

  • Weaknesses:
  • Sometimes trusts people too fast.
  • Can be stubborn if he thinks he's right

Life Story:
Joseph balboa was born in Dublin, Ireland. Life was not easy for him growing up. His family was very poor, so he was in a council house in a rough area. He faced many challenges from an early age. from money to the horrific street violence, but it created who he is today, developing serious determination and perseverance

As a teenager, he witnessed all the effects of crime, poverty, and addiction. These experiences have scarred him for life, but also given him the willpower to become more. He gets the motivation to become better and fight for what is right, and when Joseph becomes an adult, he travels to different parts of the world, discovering many cultures and facing many different challenges, but this created more of a need for Joseph to become a better man than what he already was.

Career Story: Joseph set out and began hsi career in the usss working long shifts as only an officer his job wasnt easy lots of paperwork along with having to put his life on the line nearly everyday but he got through it. He gained many skills, becoming a very good marksman and keeping calm in very high stress. He grew a reputation as a man that is willing to give his life for what matters to him in his first few weeks in the USSS, there was an attack on the governor where Joseph stepped up to the task and risked his own life, showing how much he cared about his job. He was quickly promoted throughout the ranks before reaching deputy warden. Joseph was never happier about this and decided this is the position he would stay at or at the most become warden. Many people realised and respected him for this choice. Joseph became someone who you could count on and rely on. His childhood in Dublin is what allowed Joseph to have this accountability, along with his discipline.


Outcomes:

  1. Joseph can take bribes (up to $100,000 or weapons/ammo/illegal items equivalent to 100k as a bribe).
  2. Joseph can lie about requesting a lawyer, lie about identification/not to show any identification to any suspect/lawyer/State Employee.
  3. Joseph can Talk to people with disrespect (keeping within the server rules )
  4. Joseph can cuff civilians or LEOs to break their bodycams (/try and /do commands, MAX TWICE) and/or kill them if personal info is at risk. (Needs a real reason)
  5. Joseph can remove peopleโ€˜s criminal background or from wanted list for a bribe (up to 100k or weapons equivalent to it)
  6. Joseph Can sell weapons and ammo to criminals (purchased from black market)
  7. Joseph can beat up / torture prisoners , civilians if they make her angry (Needs a real reason and cannot kill them)
  8. Joseph can start Prison Break only for money not for favour (Only with USB).
  9. Joseph can help and participate in the any family IC events.
  10. Joseph can become a hostage for gangs (up to $100,000 or weapons/ammo/illegal items equivalent to 100k as a bribe).
 
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Kayess Exe

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Incorrect format.
Your character's age (16) does not logically match the adult career history. Additionally, there are several grammatical errors and pronoun mistakes throughout the text. specifically in Outcome 7, where you used "her" instead of "him."

Please fix these issues and reapply.
 
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